Half of this story is straight out of my personal post-game canon. Half of it is delightful surprises. I could not be happier. I'm very engaged by your Hawke, her damage and badassery and attempts to make a life; I love all of her warm banter with Varric and Isabela. You've captured exactly what made me love Varric -- he's such a good guy, and he works so hard to take care of the people around him. And then he makes fun of them.
(Couple of little nitpicks. You refer to Highever when I think you mean Hightown; Hightown is a district in Kirkwall, Highever is the city the Couslands rule. Varric's brother's name is Bartrand, with no E. And ... I spotted a typo, but it was the kind spellcheck won't catch, and now I can't find it again. I think it was in dialogue. Argh, I'm useless.)
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Date: 2011-05-10 02:23 pm (UTC)(Couple of little nitpicks. You refer to Highever when I think you mean Hightown; Hightown is a district in Kirkwall, Highever is the city the Couslands rule. Varric's brother's name is Bartrand, with no E. And ... I spotted a typo, but it was the kind spellcheck won't catch, and now I can't find it again. I think it was in dialogue. Argh, I'm useless.)
In conclusion: :D :D :D :D :D